Saturday, September 24, 2011

You

I saw you carrying on with your life
Though I knew there was a part of you waiting for me
I knew it yet I always doubted that fact
How can this be?
Don't ask
Just listen
I watched you, smiling hoping my smile changed something
Praying that it did
Made you smile
Lifted your spirit
Washed away the pain
Gave you hope
Saved you from self-doubt
Engulfed you in compassion
Took you away from the world
Brought me to your mind
Even for a moment
A moment can last a lifetime
What about forever?
What is wrong with wanting forever?
Now's enough
And a forever promise is...
Empty
Yet desired

5.30 a.m. 8/8/2011 

6 comments:

Ammar said...

Really good try and I am sure its got some meaning to it or some event.. but really nice .. its got the feeling of leaving, departure.. empty spaces.. but hope somehow lies there

Rux said...

This looks like something written with a lot of underlying passion!

"What is wrong with wanting forever?
Now's enough
And a forever promise is...
Empty
Yet desired"

Like this part a lot ^

ViCtoria* said...

Nice! :)

Windswept Dreams said...

Even though i'm reading it for the tenth time, I feel its different every time. But what I love most about this poem is the ending. Rux already quoted it so no need for me to quote it again :p

Always desired <3
do keep writing :)

Noor said...

Thanks for the encouragement everyone. Much needed.

Wish I could explain the reason behind this one, I don't know myself. I just want to say that if it was something personal and actually had a hidden meaning, I wouldn't have probably published it.

Waed S. said...

What about forever?
What is wrong with wanting forever?
Now's enough
And a forever promise is...
Empty
Yet desired


^^ I LOVE this part!
your poetry attempts are good =D do write some more =)